Hey! This is part of a work in progress that I've been typing up the past few days. Tell me if you like it, then moar shall come. But all I really want is critique. pic unrelated but still cool link: http://www.megaupload.com/?d=EYBZI89R
anyone? :c
Absolutely loving it. Afraid I can't offer much in the way of critique, but definitely keep on doin' what you're doin'.
>>1173 excellent! (goes back to typing)
i guess that's as much praise as i'll get huh
does anybody want to see anymore? because i have more. but you ain't getting it unless i see so responses >:I
I'd praise you more, but it would probably sound like a hollow echo! That said, I do think that the fatty erotica world would be a sadder and emptier place without the continuance and conclusion of this fine tale.
>>1190 alright cool! you win this: http://www.megaupload.com/?d=O8PR8SAI i'd just like to keep this topic bumped, so i guess you could comment on what you like about my stories, the characters, plot twists (lol maybe not), or if it's sexy enough or not. i think it's sexy. do you think it's sexy? :c
Well, in general, I like the descriptiveness of the individual "fat" body parts, and I'm digging the whole metagame RPG plot. It's a unique angle of attack, I think, and I'm interested to see exactly how it pans out.
>>1193 sweet man planning on releasing next chapter tomorrow (well, later today.) will include: at LEAST one new character (most likely more) moar fattiness plot thickening/villain introduced perhaps
Needs more ponies. In fact scrap the entire idea so far, and make it about ponies.
>>1200 >nope.avi sup shadow
>>1200 Why are you so desperate for attention? You're seriously coming off as a complete asshole by demanding that people praise your work. I say praise because if it was anything besides praise I.e. actual critique you would simply disregard it as a troll. You have the capability of being a good writer, but for god's sake, learn some fucking humility.
>>1208 I agree. You're acting like a twat. Just update the story as you complete each chapter and allow people to voice their opinions. When people tell you what's wrong with your writing, LISTEN TO THEM. Don't brush them off and call them assholes. That's what Liam Gallagher did. And he's a douche.
The cat is literature. The murderous, psychopathic bunny is you. SYMBOLISM!
>>1210 2DEEP4U
>>1209 i never called anybody an asshole...? except maybe for the guys who said "LOL MAKE IT PONIEZ!!" also i'm sorry if i'm coming off as a douche. but the only thing i was asking for was critique to improve. is that so wrong? ;A;
No. But it is wrong to hold a story for ransom until someone does so.
>>1217 oh. yeah i guess that's wrong. i just wanted some criticism, and it'd be nice if i could get it between chapters. also next installment delayed because i was out today :I
>>1216
more is still coming, had a lot to do these past weeks.
more is out YEAH http://www.megaupload.com/?d=ZP4UPDGK as always questions/comments please
keep up the good work